Reflection Journal – Beating procrastination
This
semester is my forth semester of studies in National University of Singapore
(NUS) and I am still learning to adapt the different learning environment and
system compared to my previous learning experience.
In year
2012, I graduated from Republic Polytechnic and I was one of the gold medalists
from my graduating batch. The learning system that my polytechnic adopts is problem-based
learning system and daily-grade system which students will be graded based on
their daily learning performance as well as three understanding tests
throughout the semester; students are divided into different teams to work out for
a solution to the problem with the guidance of a facilitator. The facilitator
will guide us along whenever there is a need without giving any direct solution
to the question and students are supposed to present the solutions to class
before the lesson ends. Unlike in NUS, students are required to attend both
lectures and tutorials. Students get the first-hand knowledge from lecturer
during lecture time, but I would say this is slightly harder to have an interactive
learning experience than my polytechnic due to the bigger class size and
different system. In a later date, students will revisit the knowledge taught
in class during tutorial class and it is indeed a good time to clarify any
doubts with your tutors.
To be honest,
I preferred problem-based learning system more and I believed that this is one
of the crucial factors that can make me excel in my diploma course. Just
because of the daily presentation, I was somehow being ‘forced’ to understand
everything that is related to the problem in class very well and complete the
works on time. Hence, I did very well during my polytechnic times as I did not
go home with any doubts every day.
However, by
far I am not doing so well in NUS due to my laziness. Without the pressure
coming from the daily grade system and less opportunity of clarifying doubts in
class have worsened the whole condition, I became less motivated and slowly turned
into a procrastinator. Procrastination does not make me feel good and I know I should
not be doing it this way, yet still I continue to procrastinate.
Through reflection,
I realized I have not putting in a lot of effort in the past few semesters and I
have now decided to make a change in my remaining semesters because of my
parents. I thought that my parents have been disappointed with me and almost
wanted to give up on me, yet they still gave me encouragement and supports
which really touched me a lot. From the day onwards, I told myself that I should
do something to make a change and I want to beat the bad habit of procrastinating.
I want to be a more organized people because organized people can control their
life whereas for unorganized people, they let life control them. They do
whatever is the most convenient or urgent at the time and hence it resulting in
a poor work quality in most of the time. I do not want it to happen in my life
again. Thereby, I have been done some research on that topic and I realized that
lack of time management skill is the main root cause.
Learning to manage time is equivalent to learning
how to improve the quality of life. I have
come up with some approaches to use my time in a more efficient way; there are
setting my goals, making a to-do lists to remind me of what should be done at
the particular time, priortizing my tasks to make sure that all tasks can be
met by their deadlines and last would be keeping a detailed agenda in my calendar.
In reality, making a different and exercising time management is not as easy as
what is being written here. I really need to put in a lot of effort to execute
my plan, and monitor my changes at the same time. All these need self-control
as well and I do know that this transformation process is going to be tough,
but yet it is worth doing. I have turned 24 years old this year and it is time
for me to take responsible for my life, the way I react and my choices.
This essay is easy to understand because there is a clear structure of the process from past to future. With the additional background information about your polytechnic life included in the essay, it gives more clarity to understand better the procrastination problem in your NUS life. It is also good to include your reasons for the changes that your want to make in your life since this makes them more convincing.
ReplyDeleteSome sentences are too lengthy and can be broken into two parts to give more 'breathing' spaces for the reader. Also, the solutions to tackle your procrastination problem could be more specific so that you are more clear and willing to change as compared to just coming out generic solutions. (this is just a personal note, so you can disagree with me.)
These are some mistakes that I have found:
1)"... problem-based learning system and daily-grade system which students will be graded based on their daily learning performance..." -- instead of 'which', it should be 'in which' or 'whereby'.
2) " ...to work out for a solution to the problem ..." -- no need 'for'
3) "...students will revisit the knowledge taught in class during tutorial class and it is indeed a good time to clarify any doubts with your tutors." -- Instead of using 'yours', 'their' should be used in this case since your subject of this sentence is 'students'.
4) "... yet they still gave me encouragement and supports which really touched me a lot." -- There is no 's' in 'supports' since it is an uncountable noun and is understood that it is a plural noun in this case.
5) "I want to be a more organized people because organized people can control their life whereas for unorganized people, they let life control them." -- the first 'organized people' should be 'organized person'. I think this is just a careless mistake.
Good job! :)
The essay has been structured quite well and the clear link between a problem, realisation and a solution has been made.
ReplyDeleteA few grammatical errors can be spotted but they can be improved upon eventually. You also must be careful with your choice of words and their contextual use. (yet still I continue to procrastinate.), (I want to be a more organized people because organized people can control their life), (yet they still gave me encouragement and supports which really touched me a lot.)
It might help you to correct these errors if you go through the essay once again.
I commend you on the solution to your problem, that you have come up with and hope that you are successful in achieving your goals.
All the best!
Huey Li,
ReplyDeleteContent and organisation: Thank you for sharing your learning journey at poly and here at NUS with me. I enjoyed reading it.
Overall, this is a very good piece of reflection. You articulated your ideas well, and you successfully linked your ideas from past, present and future. You are obviously a very capable student. I am sure you can continue to excel with hardwork and determination.
Language: Pay attention to the following
1. Think about the use of tenses: Is there a need to change between present and future tenses here?
…students are divided into different teams to work out for a solution to the problem with the guidance of a facilitator. The facilitator will guide us along whenever there is a need without giving any direct solution to the question and students are supposed to present the solutions to class before the lesson ends…
2. Be precise: What do you mean a different system? Has the difference in system been previously described?
but I would say this is slightly harder to have an interactive learning experience than my polytechnic due to the bigger class size and different system.
3. Try to put describing words (i.e. very well) next to the word it describes.
understand everything that is related to the problem in class very well
4. time = period, not times. Think about the difference between time and times:
Hence, I did very well during my polytechnic times
5. Missing verb form: have not + ? + putting….
Through reflection, I realized I have not putting in a lot of effort in the past few semesters a…
6. Support is an uncountable noun.
7. Use of singular/plural noun:
I want to be a more organized people
8. Subject-verb agreement:
hence it resulting in a poor work quality in most of the time.
9. Incorrect verb form:
I have been done some research on that topic and
10. Incorrect word form: responsible
I have turned 24 years old this year and it is time for me to take responsible for my life
Good use of parallelism
I have come up with some approaches to use my time in a more efficient way; there are setting my goals, making a to-do lists to remind me of what should be done at the particular time, priortizing my tasks to make sure that all tasks can be met by their deadlines and last would be keeping a detailed agenda in my calendar.
Priscilla,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your effort in making the corrections.
1)"... problem-based learning system and daily-grade system which students will be graded based on their daily learning performance..." -- instead of 'which', it should be 'in which' or 'whereby'.
The use of 'which' is correct in this sentence. 'Which' describes the system, and 'in which' describes what could happen/be found in the system.
2) " ...to work out for a solution to the problem ..." -- no need 'for'
Correct, it is more acceptable to use 'for' in this case.
3) "...students will revisit the knowledge taught in class during tutorial class and it is indeed a good time to clarify any doubts with your tutors." -- Instead of using 'yours', 'their' should be used in this case since your subject of this sentence is 'students'.
Correct
4) "... yet they still gave me encouragement and supports which really touched me a lot." -- There is no 's' in 'supports' since it is an uncountable noun and is understood that it is a plural noun in this case.
Correct
5) "I want to be a more organized people because organized people can control their life whereas for unorganized people, they let life control them." -- the first 'organized people' should be 'organized person'. I think this is just a careless mistake.
Correct
Dear Dr.Misty,
ReplyDeleteI have re-published the revised version of my reflection journal to the blog. Changes are highlighted in yellow and I looking forward to hearing from you again regarding to my work done.
Thank you in advance for your comment and time. :)
Huey Li,
ReplyDeleteMisty: You are very welcome
Great job on the corrections! See my feedback below:
This semester is my forth semester of studies in National University of Singapore (NUS) and I am still learning to adapt the different learning environment and system compared to my previous learning experience.
In year 2012, I graduated from Republic Polytechnic and I was one of the gold medalists from my graduating batch. The learning system that my polytechnic adopts is problem-based learning system and daily-grade system which students will be graded based on their daily learning performance as well as three understanding tests throughout the semester. A class consists of 25 students and students are divided into different teams to work out for a solution to the problem with the guidance of a facilitator. The facilitator guides us along whenever there is a need without giving any direct solution to the question and students are supposed to present the solutions to class before the lesson ends. Unlike in NUS, students are required to attend both lectures and tutorials. Students get the first-hand knowledge from lecturer during lecture time, but I would say this is slightly harder to have an interactive learning experience than my polytechnic due to the bigger class size and different learning system mentioned earlier. (CORRECT-EXCELLENT JOB ON THE CORRECTIONS) In a later date, students will revisit the knowledge taught in lectures during tutorial class and it is indeed a good time to clarify any doubts with their (CORRECT) tutors.
To be honest, I prefer problem-based learning system more and I believe that this is one of the crucial factors that can make me excel in my diploma course. Just because of the daily presentation, I was somehow being ‘forced’ to understand everything in depth (CORRECT) that is related to the problem in class very well and complete the assignments on time. Hence, I did very well during my time (CORRECT) in (AT) Republic Polytechnic (CORRECT) as I went home without any doubts every day.
ReplyDeleteHowever, by far I am not doing so well in NUS due to my laziness. Without the pressure coming from the daily grade system and less opportunity of clarifying doubts in class, it worsened the whole condition. I became less motivated and slowly turned into a procrastinator. Procrastination does not make me feel good and I know I should not be doing it this way, yet still I continue to procrastinate.
Through reflection, I realized I have not been putting (CORRECT) in a lot of effort in the past few semesters and I have now decided to make a change in my remaining semesters because of my parents. I thought that my parents have been disappointed with me and almost wanted to give up on me, yet they still gave me encouragement and support (CORRECT) which really touched me a lot. From that day onwards, I told myself that I should do something to make a change and I want to beat the bad habit of procrastinating. I want to be a more organized person (CORRECT) who can take control of my life instead of being unorganized and let life controls me. In the past, I did whatever was the most convenient or urgent at the time and hence, I usually delivered works (WORK. NOTE THE DIFFERENCES BETWEEN WORK AND WORKS) that were of poor quality most of the time. I do not want it to happen in my life again. Thereby, I have done (CORRECT)some research on this topic and I realized that the lack of time management skill is the main root cause.
Learning to manage time is equivalent to learning how to improve the quality of life. I have come up with some approaches to use my time in a more efficient way; there are setting my goals, making a to-do lists to remind me of what should be done at the particular time, prioritizing my tasks to make sure that all tasks can be met by their deadlines and last would be keeping a detailed agenda in my calendar. In reality, making such huge changes and exercising time management is not as easy as what is being written here. I really need to put in a lot of effort to execute my plan, and monitor my changes at the same time. All these need self-control as well and I do know that this transformation process is going to be tough, but yet it is going to be worth doing. I am turning 24 years old this year and it is time for me to take responsibility (CORRECT) for my life, the way I react and my choices.